Haven and Heath Trailer

[Jackard]

i think comparing the content shown in both trailers is a good way to improve yours

original
:03 cabin interior
:05 homestead exterior
:08 mining with friend, poorly lit but lasts long enough AND selects mine ability from menu
:16 farming by hand
:23 smelting ore
:31 construction
:35 combat: fox
:44 combat: bear (shows him get mad)
:51 crafting: cooking, social life
1:00 credits

yours
:06 wagon in wilderness, cargo management
:13 mining, poorly lit cave
:21 smelting, established village
:25 cabin interior
:28 village exterior, doing nothing
:35 inventory management
:37 farming
:46 boating
:53 combat: boar
:59 social life?
1:02 combat: fox
1:06 credits

suggested sequence:

DISCLAIMER EDIT HEY IDIOTS THESE ARE FUCKING EXAMPLES OF A TRAILER SHOWING PROGRESSION

foraging in wilderness [noob clothes]
catching a rabbit or fishing
constructing homestead with friends (names colored green) [basic clothes]
cabin interior, quick inventory management
combat with fox in wilderness
farming: harvesting and planting by hand at homestead with friends [straw hat]
crafting: friends cooking, like one person roasting and another baking with oven
walking up to cave, entering it -> prelit mining segment with friend [mining hat]
smelting ore
lighting a village idol with friends [good clothes]
terraforming: laying brick or planting trees in village, people in background
sparring with friends [combat clothes]
boating up to a boar -> combat with boar
making a trade with someone (actor with name colored yellow) [merchant clothes]
tracking scents with friends [ranger clothes]
ramming a palisade with friends (actor running around inside with name colored red)
riding wagon through your established village [best clothes]

[AAlex]

I can add quite a few of these, a lot are really good ideas, again its the audio aspect i'm a bit sketchy on but I'm sure i'll find something

[rozn]

Jackard, if you want to change the whole video in your view make it yourself. Those are good ideas but there is a certain amount of time. It doesn't need many major fixes.

[AAlex]

He's trying to help, and I appreciated all the comments, negative or not.

[Jackard]

Jackard if you want to change the whole video in your view make it yourself. Those are good ideas but there is a certain amount of time. It doesn't need many major fixes.

I'm pointing out problems, then taking the extra step and offering possible solutions. Why you bitching?

[rozn]

Jackard if you want to change the whole video in your view make it yourself. Those are good ideas but there is a certain amount of time. It doesn't need many major fixes.

I'm pointing out problems, then taking the extra step and offering possible solutions. Why you bitching?

Your list does look good, but it feels like you just want to change the whole video. Nothing against you. Some should be added but the idol for instance would be asking him to re-make one and then he would have to wait 24h.

[Jackard]

yea well that's because theres room for improvement, as others have pointed out. "better than the others" doesnt mean "finished"

you didn't think a first try would be good enough did you? these things cant be halfhearted, there is no deadline to worry about here

[rozn]

yea well that's because theres room for improvement, as others have pointed out. "better than the others" doesnt mean "finished"

you didn't think a first try would be good enough did you? these things cant be halfhearted, there is no deadline to worry about here

Ofc not but that doesn't mean parts of it aren't good. Like I said some things are nice and some need improvement. Your list seemed like what should be done in the video step by step. Im not arguing more on this, it looks good and doesn't need to be completely re-written.

[Jackard]

Ofc not but that doesn't mean parts of it aren't good. Like I said some things are nice and some need improvement. Your list seemed like what should be done in the video step by step. Im not arguing more on this, it looks good and doesn't need to be completely re-written.

just a reminder, it's not your place to defend him against constructive criticism. whether or not he uses any of the suggestions on my list is totally his decision. your whiteknighting is not needed here

[GrimEggbert]

Ofc not but that doesn't mean parts of it aren't good. Like I said some things are nice and some need improvement. Your list seemed like what should be done in the video step by step. Im not arguing more on this, it looks good and doesn't need to be completely re-written.

He's offering suggestion, not telling him how to do it. Christ you're dense.