Haven: My H&H Experience

[Seren_Elder]

I've been through alot in a few months, here is my story:


As i emerged in the Cavern, i went to the Name person, clueless of names, it hit me right in the Soul (i was a spirit), "Haven", after collecting my stuff, i set off in my long journey through the wilderness.

A few minutes later, i discover a village, with no idol, and it is abadoned, i thought to settle there, this led me to getting my brother to come with me.
Days passed, we went out exploring and found a town named "Neapolis", as i walked near the port, i saw ThunderCat (Koya), Alex (AlexTheCool), Alyx2, and Ravian II, So we all proceeded to discuss, and it was a great start.

About a week later, i wanted a claim due to being robbed, losing a whole table of food, so i proceeded to see the price of yeomanry, it was 4000LP, i was shocked, however i didn't know how to earn LP fast and good, so i aggresively cut EVERY tree in sight, Alyx2 didn't mind, but Ravian didn't like it just one bit, i caused 3 months of damage, and got knocked out.

I avoided the work of replanting by going to a new village owned by "Toska Slabyh", It was a cluttered, but nice place, we all got along, until the LS apparently "Murdered" somebody, we had to flee, for the sake of our lives, somebody with extremely high skill values would be after us and kill everyone of us in sight, Toska Slabyh had Oathed us all the way back to My old town, except a little south, which was called Apolion

However, toska slabyh went emo for a bit (I don't know why), then quit, i was devastated, alone with people i didn't know well, not well at all, since i didn't like these guys and there was no key for me, i had to leave for a while, weeks passed, possibly a month or two, when i decided to come back, and begun a huge plantation, locked from the outside world, like a prison, it was just me, a stone mansion, a few cupboards full of silkmoth eggs, and 2 log cabins, i begun work, life was great, my attempt of revenge faded, however, a offer was from Emberwood, to move in, a far bigger city, with a brick wall, i was amazed by my eyes when i accepted this and arrived at my new location.

I didn't manage to do alot, though we found a village claim outside of us named "Temp", we declared war and hit the crossroad down to thin dust, however, the idea was foolish, and caused a loss, me, the murderer took everything but my linen cloth, though i dropped my chest of silkmoths at Sordo's plot.

Thinking it was just one mistake, and knowing about reincarnation, i proceed to making a new character

ALT account at my first village:

I still had this account to lure a boar away, i decided to check on the village, nothing was stolen, but i found a odd runestone saying "Im sorry for your loss", so i looked around, and my palisade was decayed nearly.


New Character: HavenII

This character is much better than the first Haven, this character made me happy, thousands of beef, stacks of bricks and towers of linen cloth, this town was more successful, after a while, i met 4 people living on this island, 1 has left, 1 has been inactive and 2 are still here, We have built up a claim and built our bonfire, as soon as i get the last antlers and teeth and get my claim finished fully, the bonfire will be lit!


Soon, my peace was broken, finding alot of Disgusting Stenchs of Theft, i set off for my journey to find this faggot, this time with more help, taking down walls as i go through, tearing through camp wildshaft, kabachino and all the other crappy towns in the way, stomping everything in my path

(More is coming soon)

[Ezekiel]

You should have given your murderer THE CLAMPS.


Also, nice story. Glad to see that you kept pushing on a new guy after you were killed. I've seen too many people say "fuck it" after they die.

[Dataslycer]

A bit more elaboration would make the story more interesting.

[Seren_Elder]

Yeah, i was on the verge

But our village gave the murderer THE CLAMPS

the murderer got killed by ravian.


also, which part needs elaborating.

[hfacktor]

Wow and I thought being a hermit was boring.

[Seren_Elder]

It was very hard living in alot of towns, my current town has 5x more meat than all my others

[Ezekiel]

Yeah, i was on the verge

But our village gave the murderer THE CLAMPS

the murderer got killed by ravian.


also, which part needs elaborating.

I'd say the majority of it needs elaborating. It's mostly brief broken sentences that partially describe events. A good story has depth and feeling that draws you in, making you beg for more tales of adventure. Make us feel bad that you were murdered. Make us picture you on an epic adventure in the wilderness looking for civilization. Make us feel the cold sting of the cave air on our skin as we read about your trek through that mysterious cavern that you briefly mentioned. Make us want revenge against the thieves who plagued you due to not having a claim.

Or at least make it so that it's formatted better. It's weird to read a sentence that breaks with a comma, and then continues four lines down.

[Seren_Elder]

Wait, what cavern?

[Ezekiel]

Wait, what cavern?

First line or whatever.
"As I emerged in the Cavern".

Figured you were talking about a cave. I skimmed over the first part, so meh. I re-read it and now I realize that you were talking about the starting area, but still, throw a cave in there somewhere. A cave with bears... and ghosts. OoOoO Cavebulbs OoOoO

[Seren_Elder]

Its actually all a true story, and i could only fit a cave in while my search for a mine